Developing Dialogue

 One of the main critiques we received from our midterm was that the opening scene relied too heavily on action and did not establish the conflict clearly through dialogue and too much was going on. As a result we decided to expand the introductory sequence to feel more like an opening scene.

Dialogue in crime films often functions as exposition disguised as casual conversation. Rather than directly explaining the plot, characters reveal hierarchy, illegal activity, and personal conflict through subtle changes.

My classmate and teammate in the project, Jake Landis originally wrote up a script we could use that matches our story board. We decided to both go over the script and revise it to sound more fluid and natural.

Opening Conversation:

Joey (Tony Grasso):
"The Yankees got a game tonight. I've got a few players making sure they don't play their best. So if you're betting, bet on the underdogs"

Jake (Romano De Luca):

"How much did you put down?"

Joey (Tony Grasso):

"Enough. A hundred grand. Not too much. don't want to draw attention. Unlike that last job you two handled." (Pauses) "You get rid of the body yet?"

Jake (Romano De Luca):

"It's still in my trunk"

Joey (Tony Grasso):

(Coldly) "Then fix it"

Private Conversation:

Lucas (Joe Zaccardo):

"You ever notice how Tony talks to us? Like we're disposable"

Jake (Romano De Luca):

"He's the boss. That's how it works"

Lucas (Joe Zaccardo):

"Doesn't mean it has to"

Jake (Romano De Luca):

"What are you saying?"

Lucas (Joe Zaccardo):

"Im saying... what if were the ones calling the shots?"

Final Line:

Joey (Tony Grasso):

"Keep an eye on them"

Scotty (Beppe Torta):

"That's what I'm here for"